Friday, February 01, 2008

Loony Limerick Competition #1

You Can Have The Last Word (Really)

Finally, here's your chance to be Shakespeare - well, kind of. I've made up this limerick and I want you to provide the last line.

As you know, limericks consist of five lines, with the first and second line rhyming with the fifth; and the third and fourth lines rhyming with each other.

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,

All you need to do is to think of a last line and leave it in the comments section here. There is a (secret) judge monitoring your entries and waiting to choose the best effort. Extra points will be given for humour and creativity.

The rules are simple:
  • You can enter as many times as you want to
  • If you have a brilliant afterthought, you can enter again
  • The competition closes 48 hours after this post is published
  • The fifth line must rhyme with "Queens" and "teens"
  • The judge's decision will not be swayed by bribery (I think!).
Go ahead and have fun ....

41 comments:

Old Wom Tigley said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When he became the new face for McClean's

Patty said...
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Patty said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When his teeth still looked so green.

Patty said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
Because now he was addicted to caffeine.

Vic, the Cariboo Ponderer said...

Is that 48 hours from your time in Australia?

You might have to allow those of us that are a day late in life a little more time to get the creative juices flowing.

Vi said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When young girls tried to get in his jeans!

Akelamalu said...

Great fun David!

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When he became star of the big screens.

I must say I'd vote for old wom tigley's!

Corey~living and loving said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When he married Miss Purty McPheen.

Great idea David. so fun!

Jeni said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
Because Halitosis was well beyond his means.

imac said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
I will date that girl by any means.

Kimberly said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
Because with them he now refused to be seen.

Tiffany Norris said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
Because now when he smiles, he just preens.
(I think I like the "jeans" one better.)

Queen of My Domain said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
The day he signed up for the Marines.

indicaspecies said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens,
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
And wherever he went, he created scenes

indicaspecies said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens,
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed
For his halitosis, he needed vaccines

David said...

Unfortunately this morning my "creative juices" as vic calls them aren't flowing. I'll have to think on this one!

David said...

Sorry, the "creative juices" as vic calls them just aren't flowing this morning! I'll have to think on this one. :)

Anonymous said...

There was a young fellow from Queens
Who had really bad breath in his teens
So he flossed and he brushed
And his buddies were all crushed
When the end indeed justified the means

!!

Carol McFarlane

katydidnot said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When he decided to start eating beans.

velvetginger said...

I think VI should win...don't even want to compete with that!!!

Sandi McBride said...

There was a young fellow from Queens
Who had really bad breath in his teens
So he flossed and he brush
and his buddies were all crushed
when they discovered the problem lay in his genes

BRUNO said...

I like katydidnot, and vi, as well! Aw hell---they're ALL good!

A fella could almost fit that limerick into a cadence, you know---a "jody-call"! Except I'm afraid my version just might end up like "Mr. Comment Deleted"!

Uh-uh---don't get me started on "mens' room wall poetry"! And some of 'em could even DRAW---Shakespeare, and Rembrandt, all in one...!

Tammy said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When they saw them gleem.

The Egel Nest said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When he traded his friends for machines.

The Egel Nest said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When his flatulence resulted from beans.

The Egel Nest said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
They were yellow as Yitzchak Rabin's.

The Egel Nest said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
Have to wait 'til the dentist reconvenes.

The Egel Nest said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
Still looked like disfigured wolverines.

edmundnesbitt said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
and his knickers all split at the seams!

(and you could see his bum!)

Tee hee Uncle David! I laughed at this.

I am going away for a few days as My nana is knitting me some decent clothes for my expedition.

Mummy will told me about your weekend meandering thingy so i will have a think when she tells me what it is this week.

Lots of Love
Edmund

VP said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens,
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
By the rush of young girls in their teens!

Great fun for a Friday! Thanks for adding me to your blogroll and see you next Wednesday - if not before :)

David said...

Well, I managed to come up with something, but it doesn't rhyme very well:

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When he brought them to the dentist for free.

gaz said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
because now he eats too many beans!

Merisi said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens,
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed
'Cause he run away with the Smithereens.

Bubba's Sis said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When their girlfriends now found him so keen!


I added you to my blogroll, too, David - thanx for all the kind comments on my blog! Love from Texas....

Amrita said...

....
When he became Superstar of the screems.

(not satisfied, but time will run out)

i beati said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed
For he spent al his time in latrines..

Max-e said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
'Cos his breath smelt like farting from beans

the mother of this lot said...

There was ayoung fellow from Queens
Who had really bad breath in his teens
So he flossed and he brushed
And his buddies were crushed
When his smile seemed to rival James Dean's.

Animals with Opinions said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed
When his eyes turned aquamarine

gerald the rhyming goat

sybil law said...

I realize I am late as heck but still:
There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
When they found out he gargled with beans.
So stupid, I know. But fun! Hahaha

Anonymous said...

There was a young fellow from Queens,
Who had really bad breath in his teens.
So he flossed and he brushed,
And his buddies were all crushed,
because now the pussy he got was their mom's francien's